Percentage of Population Aged 65 and Over in Three Countries (1900-2000) Year Australia Belgium Costa Rica 1990 5% 8% 3% 1950 7% 10% 4% 2000 15% 18% 12% Write at least 150 words.

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table above shows
how
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the
populations
aged 65 and over in three
countries
which are
Australia
,
Belgium
, and
Costa
Rica
since
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from
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1900-
2000
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to 2000
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. The table shows the
populations
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population
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aged 65
decline
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declined
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from 1950 to 1990, but there
is
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was
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exponential
grow
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growth
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from 1990-2000. In 1950, there were more people living in
Belgium
than
Australia
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in Australia
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and
Costa
Rica
. The number of
Belgium
percentage
populations
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population
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was 10%,
while
Australia
and
Costa
Rica
was
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were
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7% and 4%. Between 1950 and 1990, all
countries
had
been
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declined
2
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by 2
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%
for
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Belgium
and
Australia
, but
Costa
Rica
declined
just
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by just
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1%.
Then
, between 1900 and 2000, all
countries
had been growth
over
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of over
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10% percentage
population
. The highest percentage of
population
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the population
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is
Belgium
with 18% followed by
Australia
15% and
Costa
Rica
12%.
According to
the table, the growth
population
aged 65 in
Belgium
and
Australia
was
same
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the same
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over the same period
in
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between 1950 - 2000. Some reason probably that the country
have
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has
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already
address
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addressed
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issues
such
as healthcare provision, pension systems, social support structures,
and
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apply
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etc. So several strategies that
countries
to manage the growth of elderly
populations
. One of many reasons is strengthening healthcare infrastructure to meet the specific needs of
an elderly
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elderly populations
an elderly population
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populations
, including medical facilities, care
centers
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centres
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, and home healthcare services. Measure to enhance the
overall
well-being of
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the elder
an elder
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elder
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elderly
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population
.
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Introduction & Conclusion
Be sure to provide a clear introduction that sets the context for the data presented and a conclusion that summarises the main trends and implications without introducing new data.
Paragraphing & Linking
Organize your essay with clear paragraphs, each focusing on specific points or comparisons across the three countries. Use appropriate linking words to demonstrate logical connections between ideas.
Task Response & Examples
Present a more detailed analysis of the data by comparing the changes over time for each country and explaining possible reasons with hypothetical or real examples to support the main points in your analysis.
Coherence & Cohesion
Improve coherence by ensuring that the text is logically organized and that the relationships between sentences and paragraphs are clear. The use of cohesive devices should be accurate and not repetitive.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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