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It is sad that life is becoming increasingly stressful for most people. What is the reason of this phenomenon and how could this problem be solved?

The
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 past people were more relaxed and felt happier than now
due to
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 the modern lifestyle. The technology and science progress
are
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 very impressive but
are
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is
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 the population
be
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happy now? it is hard to answer that because a large number of the public is living
the
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a
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 stressful
life
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 and
this
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 trend is
quite
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increasing dramatically. Professional and personal
life
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 are the main causes and some possible solutions can be solved
this
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 trend.
This
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 essay shall discuss it briefly in the subsequent paragraphs.
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 with, professional
life
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 can stimulate more
stress
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 to mankind which means at present, getting employment is not easy like the past period because all the applicant have more skills and talent
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 each and everyone have to compete to get the job and
everyday
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 they have to prove their skills to the employers
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 they should get more stressed
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non-guarranty
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non-guarantee
 of the work. Another reason is that
personal
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life
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, people do not have more spare
time
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 to spend with their family
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the
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their
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 working
time
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. They spend more
times
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time
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on
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in
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 working places
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 of
their
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with their
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 family members,
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as
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and as
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 a result,
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stress
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the stress
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 ratio is raised.
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, people who
not
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do not
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 spend more
times
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time
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 with their closed
one
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ones
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while
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 they are suffering
stress
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 and depression. There are some feasible solutions
could
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that could
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be solved
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solve
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this
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 adverse situation. The authority should implement the
ruoes
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rules
 and regulations of
worker's
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workers'
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 employment
guarenty
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guaranty
guarantee
such
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 as
agreement
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agreements
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 and
contract
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contracts
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. The government should investigate to all the companies and organisations adhere
these
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to these
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 rules about
workers
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' job stability.
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, Finland has already implemented
in
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apply
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this
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 act to support
with
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workers
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. The
workers
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 should be worked only eight hours in
company
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instead
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 of twelve hours in order to they can spend more
time
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 with their family members,
as a result
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,
stress
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 will
be existed
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 and they can lead to being a
relaxation
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life
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 like our ancestors.
To conclude
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,
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stress
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a stressful
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life
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is
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 not
providing
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provide
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the
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apply
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life
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 satisfaction
instead
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 of mental pressure and anxiety. Lack of job
guranty
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guarantees
 and lack of
time
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spend
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spent
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 with family are the main reasons for
this
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 phenomenon,
standarised
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standardised
 working hours and the
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workers
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Workers
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act
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 are the feasible remedies.

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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks coherence due to disjointed sentence structures and improper use of linking words. There are grammatical errors and poor word choices that hinder readability. Please focus on creating clear and coherent sentences, ensuring paragraph transitions are smooth and logical.
task achievement
Your essay's task response needs improvement. You must address all parts of the task more directly with clear, relevant ideas. Ensure your essay addresses the causes of stress and offers specific, developed solutions. Moreover, please avoid repetition and stay on topic to maintain task relevance.
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