Some people believe that the best way to increase the road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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the age
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strengthen
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this
type of skills and behaviour when driving shows their personality.Moreover
, teenagers lack driving experience and cannot predict urgent situations, thus
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introducing
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the environment.
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