The bar chart illustrates the estimated number of visitors from three different realms to four places including Roma, Marid, Paris, and Liverpool in the year 2018.
The bar chart provides information about Thailand's fitness membership rates for men and women from 1985 and 2015.
Overall
, the number of female participants
experienced an upward trend; whereas
the rate of male members
showed a downward trend. Both genders showed some fluctuations. Despite the female membership rate was lower at the beginning of the period
, it outraced the male members
' figure
at the end
of the period
.
From the information given, it is noticeable that the number of female participants
was above 1000 in 1985, being lower than the male participation. Then
, the figure
showed a gradual increase to slightly under 3000 participants
in 2010 with some fluctuations. At the end
of the period
, the number of female members
declined to 2000 and was higher than the male participants
which were 1000 people.
On the other hand
, the figure
for male participants
was above 2000 at the beginning of the period
. Then
, it increased almost 100% in 1980 by showing the numbers around 4000 members
. In the next decade, it decreased gradually to around 2500 and 1800 participants
. However
, the figure
increased dramatically and reached its peak of 5000 people in 2010. Finally
, it declined sharply at the end
of the period
by only 1000 members
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