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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph compares and contrasts the amounts of
waste
 which
they
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were produced by three different
company
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companies
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 between 2000 and 2015.
Overall
,
while
, in 2000, the
company
C
 caused the lowest amount of
waste
, it passed the other two companies by generating
waste
 in 2015.
Initially
,
the
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company
 A produced 12
tonnes
waste
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of waste
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 in 2000, and
then
 its'
waste
 amount declined steadily over a period of 15 years. In 2015, approximately 9
tonnes
waste
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 emerged
by
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the
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company
 A.
On the other hand
,
although
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company
C
 had the least
waste
 compared to these other two companies in 2000, it showed
rapid
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a rapid
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 increase from 2000 to 2015 when it reached
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under 10
tonnes
waste
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of waste
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.
Furthermore
,
the
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company
C
 had production of
waste
 with almost 8
tonnes
beginning
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 of
this
 period,
however
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however,
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 its'
waste
 amount boosted significantly to 2005 with about 9
tonnes
. Until 2015,
the
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company
C
 fell dramatically
waste
 in 3
tonnes
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, company, c, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amounts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 4 times.
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