The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.
The life cycle a
process
diagram depicts the life cycle of a salmon
starting from eggs
to a mature fish.
Overall
, there are seven steps of
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salmon
staring
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growth
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growth
and development of salmon
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environment
; river , estuary and ocean.
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them
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their
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in the river which called
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is called
matur
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mature
salmon
can produce hundred
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a hundred
eggs
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that,
eggs
emerge to become baby salmon
. Afterwards, baby salmon
develop and needs
freshwater rearing to Correct subject-verb agreement
need
estabilish
their life. Until Correct your spelling
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this
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step
process
take place in the river. The next Fix the agreement mistake
processes
process
is in the estuary, in which a salmon
growth
to more Replace the word
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matur
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mature
this
process
called
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is called
etuary
rearing.
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estuary
early
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, a Correct your spelling
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salmon
migration rearing area inthe
ocean after one or three months in Correct your spelling
in the
growth
in the rearing estuary. In the ocean a salmon
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grows
dulth
fish. Correct your spelling
adult
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finally
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