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70.The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

70.The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps explain the comparison between the present and the development plan of the industrial
area
.
To begin
 with, the boulevard is currently surrounded by the factory,
spaning
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spanning
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 over to the
eastside
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east side
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 of the roundabout.
Moreover
, the farmland is located
in
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on
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 the
northside
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north side
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 of the factory
area
 and separated by the river. It is obvious that the presence of
the
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apply
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shopping
center
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centre
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, hospital, playground and school are none to be seen around the
area
as of
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today. The nearest town is located on the west side of the industrial
area
. The development of the industrial
area
 has been planned to fulfil the basic needs of the employees. About 50% of the farmland
area
 and the location of several factories will be used for the settlement of the residential
area
.
Furthermore
, employees in the future will be able to enrol their children
to
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 school located
in
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 the east side of the boulevard.
Playground
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A playground
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 will be established as well near the school. Roads, including the bridge and
boulevard
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boulevard,
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 will be expanded.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • factory complex
  • housing area
  • infrastructure
  • transportation links
  • amenities
  • environmental sustainability
  • residential buildings
  • communal facilities
  • work-life balance
  • industrial development
  • urban planning
  • green spaces
  • employee accommodation
  • accessibility
  • layout
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