The number of students who choose to study mathematics at university is low. Why do you think this is? What can be done about this situation?

Nowadays, it seems that
students
' interest in taking
mathematics
as their major at university has remained low. One possible explanation for
this
situation is that they have been thinking that
mathematics
is a difficult
subject
to study since primary
school
. The best solution for
this
situation is for
teachers
to build
students
' interest in
mathematics
since primary
school
by making classes more attractive.
Students
' mindsets about
mathematics
have remained negative. They consider math a big scary thing because
instead
of making
mathematics
a fun
subject
, most
teachers
have made
this
subject
a serious and boring
subject
since primary
school
. It might be because
this
subject
requires the full attention of
students
and high concentration in order to be understood.
For example
,
students
love studying the arts because they can discuss and work in teams with their friends.
As a result
, they found out that the arts are a fun
subject
.
This
situation can be achieved if
teachers
can change
students
' mindsets about
mathematics
from a young age.
Teachers
can start by making the class attractive.
For example
,
teachers
can do classes outdoors so that
students
can feel a little bit more relaxed when studying math, or
teachers
can make study groups and build interesting discussions among
students
. In conclusion, perhaps
students
have a low interest in
mathematics
because they believe that it has been a scary
subject
since they were young. The best solution is that
teachers
should play a role in changing
students
' minds in primary
school
and making
this
subject
attractive.
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