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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or diasgree.

#exploration #development #alternatives #fuels #priority #diasgree
In
this
 modern era, the use of fossil
fuels
became
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 prominent among the
mass
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masses
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. It should be the utmost responsibility of the officials worldwide to look for
the
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safe alternatives to make the
resources
 refined. I completely agree with the aforementioned statement, for, the use of fossil
fuels
 have been risen since
last
 decade.
To begin
 with, the primary reasons to research the possible safe ways of fossil
fuels
 include
safety
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the safety
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 of the people and the conservation of
resources
. If an individual
avoid
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to take
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taking
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 safety measures related to the use of
fuel
, one will suffer detrimental consequences. certain
kind
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kinds
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 of
fuels
 can burn and spread very rapidly,
with in
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within
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few
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a few
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 seconds everything around it will be converted into ashes. For illustration,
acording
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according
 to the Dawn News, the city of Chernobyl was razed to the ground
due to
nuclear
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a nuclear
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 explosion, the dangerous
radiations
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radiation
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are
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is
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 still present in that particular region, making it unsuitable for habitat.
Consequently
, before utilizing any kind
fuel
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of fuel
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, one should get acquainted with the safety measures to avoid
such
 ramifications.
Furthermore
, during the process of refining the
fuel
,
considerable
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 amount is lost, and it is because of the
unefficient
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inefficient
 machines. To be more precise, the world is on the brink
to
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of
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 collapse, for, the
resources
 are getting limited and not available for the large number of individuals.
For example
,
according to
 the survey by UNO,
the
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a
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 number of countries in
africa
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Africa
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 are suffering from poverty, citizens of these countries do not have enough
resources
 to make their living,
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so the
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 developed countries should preserve the
fuel
 and other
resources
form
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from
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 which the victims of
such
 harsh conditions can benefit.
Therefore
, in order to avoid
waisting
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wasting
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the
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apply
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fuel
, it is the sole
resposibility
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responsibility
 of the authorities to make
an efficient machines
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efficient machines
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 to preserve
the
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apply
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natural
resources
 in every possible way.
To sum up
, I believe that finding safe methods to preserve
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fossil
fuels
 is a need of time. It is not only the duty of authorities, but it is
also
 mandatory for the citizens to play their role and keep the
resources
 safe and sound for the people in need.
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task response
Ensure your essay presents a clear position throughout the response and provide an argument that directly addresses the question of whether exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the priority. While your position is consistent, the argument could benefit from clearer development and stronger linkage to the central question.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more logically, using appropriate paragraphing consistently. Your essay would be strengthened by the clearer development of ideas and a more coherent structure linking ideas together with appropriate transition words.
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