The tendency of news media to focus on problems and emergenciesrather than good news has a negative effect on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, I do feel that it does have some negative effects for

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media to focus more on reporting problems and emergencies to the

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, I don't feel that it

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society

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as a whole. Here

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the basis of my opinion. It is true that some

people

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may tend to be more tense, anxious, or nihilistic when consuming negative

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from their daily media.

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, seeing or hearing about a school shooting will make anyone more anxious and frightened because it may happen around their neighbourhood.

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course, a very rational response of fear, as it's our instinct helping us to keep us out of danger. The problem begins when

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start to become fixated

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the bad

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delivered on the

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, robbery, natural disasters, and other unfortunate events. As mentioned, it is logical to want to know when and where the dangers can arise and

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to foresee them. But I believe, many of these unfortunate

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that may happen are, to some degree, unforeseeable.

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, you won't know when there will be a public shooting at the mall or when and where an earthquake is going to happen.

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, there are

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that

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can still do to prevent and anticipate these events. We can take

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and learn what to do when these bad

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occur.

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people

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need to learn what should they immediately do when

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disaster happens or what should they do and avoid

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number of active

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shootings

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rising.

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believe that it's important to know and recognize the possibility of these

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occurrences

. Yes, keeping an eye out is important but it's

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unhealthy to be obsessed over the bad

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that may happen over the

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, as it may cause serious

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of anxiety and constant worry. In conclusion, it is beneficial to the

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for

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media to report crimes, disasters, or other negative topics, as it helps the

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to understand the current state of the

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that are happening around them.

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people

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should

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be educated and smart in handling these types of information, as overconsumption may lead to detriments in their mental health. As a

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people

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need to realize that obsessing over these unforeseeable events

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not healthy and that there are actions they can take for prevention and mitigation.

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For task achievement, make sure your response directly addresses all parts of the question. Your opinion should be clear and consistent throughout the essay. Provide more specific examples that are directly linked to the prompt to strengthen your argument.

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Organize your ideas logically and make your paragraphs flow smoothly. Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas. Also, ensure that your introduction and conclusion are more directly related to the question being asked.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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The tendency of news media to focus on problems and emergenciesrather than good news has a negative effect on individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some governments believe it is necessary to impose a higher tax on junk food because an increaing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much of this type of food. What do you think about this?

Some people believe that money spent on space research benefits all humanity. Others take the opposite view and say that money for this type of research is wasted. Discuss these 2 opinions / positions.

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

You have recently moved to a new place and haven’t got a chance to tell your friend. Write a letter to your friend, Where and why you move from there Compare your new place to old Where do u live now