the table below shows the result of a 20 year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events

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research for a specific reason about the

dwellers

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interest

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art events in the 20

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period. To start with, Accompanying children have been

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noticable

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ago the proportion for

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was 9 percent which was quite low,

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increased roughly 3

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, another growth

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showed

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who came for business and work

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thus

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back to 20

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the rating was 6%,

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nonetheless

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is gradually jump

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to 11%.

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also

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showed. In today's

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9% of

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attend for the special

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occasion

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yeaars

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years

before the rates were 3

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higher. Adults who desire to see specific

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or an artist had a

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means

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go to the art competitions as

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before. Nothing changed dramatically. From an

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perspective,

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art events keep going to change which depends on the reason for that.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, people with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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10
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

169 words

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the table below shows the result of a 20 year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events

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