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Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #investment #transport #systems #reductions #ticket #prices #pollution
In the contemporary era,
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the developing
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developing
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 of public
transport
 is a very disputable topic because of
the
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global warming. It is claimed that
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government
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the government
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 have to spend more funds on public
transport
as well as
 reducing ticket prices. Undoubtedly, it has many benefits, but it
also
 has some hidden demerits, which I am going to explain
further
. First and foremost, private cars and diesel engines are the main
source
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 of greenhouse gas emissions. Ecological activists argue that
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 it has to be a main government policy to reduce these emissions. The more common usage of public
transport
 may bring fresh air and solve congestion issues in metropolitan
area
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, like London, New York and Moscow.
Furthermore
, reducing prices on
the
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public tickets would have an impact on personal
decision making
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, which can lead to a decrease in private car usage.
On the other hand
, it is widely agreed that
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such
 advances as the
best developed
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 public
transport
 may not bring real benefits.
Besides
, investing funds in
this
 area
do
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 not lead to increases in
an
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 amount of public
transport
 users
due to
 the factors
such
 as
conveniece
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convenience
, comfort and lifestyle preferences.
Moreover
, decreasing
of
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ticket's
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ticket
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price
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prices
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 could not change the habits of
the
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car users, because in many countries car ownership is a status symbol. In conclusion, I am inclined to believe that, spending money on public
transport
 has to bring positive
outcome
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 in the
long-term
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.
Government
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 should not only invest money
on
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transport
,
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 but
also
to
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explain to people the effects of their policies, especially in affluent groups of citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • carbon footprint
  • mass transit
  • subsidization
  • fare reduction
  • environmental impact
  • urban planning
  • public policy
  • commuter behavior
  • infrastructural development
  • economic efficiency
  • equitable access
  • lifestyle shift
  • congestion
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