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The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides data related to
the
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electricity's
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production
 and
consumption
 in
top
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the top
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 ten countries over the year 2014. Generally speaking, China was dominant in terms of
production
 and
consumption
 of electricity
while
 the lowest country on
this
 list was
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the Korea
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Korea
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Korean
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 Republic. Units were measured in billion
kWh
.
According to
 the data, In the top 5 ranking, we could see China was on top with the highest
production
 and
consumption
 rates at around 5.300
kWh
.
On
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the
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second place,
there
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was
United
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 States which had
surplus
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a surplus
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 in
production
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the production
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 of electricity compared to
it's
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its
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consumptions
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consumption
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 with
margin
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around
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 200
kWh
. Three other countries which held positions from 3 to 5 were Russia, Japan, and India.
In contrast
, the lowest energy
production
 and
consumption
 was claimed by
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the Korea
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Korea
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Korean
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 Republic at roughly 400
kWh
, followed by Brazil and Germany
on
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 the bottom three of the country ranking respectively. The other two countries on the list were France and Canada which displayed
similirity
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similarity
 in the fact that the numbers of
production
 were higher than the
consumption's
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consumption
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 rate.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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