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Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Although
 many people believe that
paparazzi
 should not focus on the celebrity's privacy, few reveal that there is a price value for their fame in sharing photographs on social platforms. I state that they should not reveal the privacy of a star person
such
 as actors.
However
, it is prons and cons to have a debate on
this
paparazzi
 topic that will provide some views, reasons and examples in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,
paparazzi
 take photographs of actos by hiding and sharing their activities on social media.
This
 is because they get paid and survive their family life but they should not go beyond boundaries to get extra bonuses.
Likewise
, they could post the private details of famous actors by getting extra dollars.
For instance
, in recent years, television telecasted many reality-based stories
such
 as gangsters and criminal activity found in movie cinemas which did not involve any celebrity.
Thus
,
paparazzi
 can ruin someone's life by blackmailing and sharing vulgar pictures.
On the other hand
, the
paparazzi
 ought to take photographs to make people models and viral on Instagram.
This
 is because individuals get a chance to showcase their abilities to the audience and can be a role model.
For example
, in
this
 era, many youngsters have found easy ways to find bloggers or
paparazzi
 that will help them go viral quickly by showing innovative techniques.
Hence
,
paparazzi
 can be beneficial to others for the price of fame. In conclusion, the
paparazzi
 can destroy individuals' lives and make them celebrities too but, in my opinion, I would support that they should not have a right to reveal the privacy of individuals without authorization.
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Task Achievement
Regarding task response, the essay only partially addresses the requirements of the task. While the topic is recognized and an attempt to discuss both sides is made, there is a lack of clear comprehensive ideas, and the examples provided are not entirely relevant or fully developed.
Coherence & Cohesion
In terms of coherence and cohesion, the essay lacks a clear logical structure and the use of cohesive devices and paragraphing is limited or misused. The introduction and conclusion are present, but they do not set out or summarize the main points of the essay effectively. There needs to be clear topic sentences and more effective organization of ideas within paragraphs to guide the reader through the argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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