Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #paparazzi #celebrities #privacy #pictures #price #fame

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Although

many people believe that

paparazzi

should not focus on the celebrity's privacy, few reveal that there is a price value for their fame in sharing photographs on social platforms. I state that they should not reveal the privacy of a star person

such

as actors.

However

, it is prons and cons to have a debate on

this

paparazzi

topic that will provide some views, reasons and examples in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,

paparazzi

take photographs of actos by hiding and sharing their activities on social media.

This

is because they get paid and survive their family life but they should not go beyond boundaries to get extra bonuses.

Likewise

, they could post the private details of famous actors by getting extra dollars.

For instance

, in recent years, television telecasted many reality-based stories

such

as gangsters and criminal activity found in movie cinemas which did not involve any celebrity.

Thus

paparazzi

can ruin someone's life by blackmailing and sharing vulgar pictures.

On the other hand

, the

paparazzi

ought to take photographs to make people models and viral on Instagram.

This

is because individuals get a chance to showcase their abilities to the audience and can be a role model.

For example

, in

this

era, many youngsters have found easy ways to find bloggers or

paparazzi

that will help them go viral quickly by showing innovative techniques.

Hence

paparazzi

can be beneficial to others for the price of fame. In conclusion, the

paparazzi

can destroy individuals' lives and make them celebrities too but, in my opinion, I would support that they should not have a right to reveal the privacy of individuals without authorization.

Submitted by patelhardik2199 on Sun Dec 10 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Task Achievement

Regarding task response, the essay only partially addresses the requirements of the task. While the topic is recognized and an attempt to discuss both sides is made, there is a lack of clear comprehensive ideas, and the examples provided are not entirely relevant or fully developed.

Coherence & Cohesion

In terms of coherence and cohesion, the essay lacks a clear logical structure and the use of cohesive devices and paragraphing is limited or misused. The introduction and conclusion are present, but they do not set out or summarize the main points of the essay effectively. There needs to be clear topic sentences and more effective organization of ideas within paragraphs to guide the reader through the argument.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

10
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

276 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

invasion of privacy
personal space
media scrutiny
mental health
public figures
relentless pursuit
legal implications
ethical considerations
tabloid journalism
financial gain
public interest

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Living in a country where speaking a foreign language is required can provide both practical and social challenges. However, there is no set threshold for when these problems become serious problems. The social and practical effects of learning a second language in the host country will be discussed in this article, which will conclude that while there are always going to be social and practical difficulties, the degree of those difficulties varies widely depending on the situation and does not necessarily lead to grave errors. This can affect many aspects of daily life, from communication to career opportunities and even mental health.
6
band
With the increasing use and development of new technology, many machines are now able to do the work which people used to perform. DO ADV >< DISADV
There is a phenomenon of mechanical workers dominating the workforce. The writer indicates that the drawbacks of increasing unemployment rates are outweighed by the benefit of boosting productivity and new product creation
6.5
band
Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
While some claim that professionals ought to work in the countries where they did their training, others believe that anyone will be able to migrate to another country to work. From my point of view, both of the given arguments have their merits but I would lean toward the latter.
7.5
band
Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can ben taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and give your opinion.
Some people argue that human activity negatively impacts biodiversity globally. A few have a notion that there is no scope for change and on the other side many believe that possible actions can bring change.
4.5
band
Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?
In the era of technology boom, not only adults are seen on their phones more often than ever but also children because of the variety of knowledge and entertainment these devices can provide. In my opinion, it has a negative impact on children as it is distracting pupils from study other than to improve their study performance.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

With the increasing use and development of new technology, many machines are now able to do the work which people used to perform. DO ADV >< DISADV

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can ben taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and give your opinion.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?