Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, While some people think it is bad. discuss both views and state your opinion.

Some
people
believe that hosting an international sports event is positive for the
country
,
while
others believe that it is not good. A
country
will develop if they accept an international sports event,
this
will bring some advantages for the
country
such
as
increase
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income of the
country
, it would bring benefit for local sellers,
also
build international
relation
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relations
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for every
country
.
Besides
, it will increase
thieft
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theft
cases. In my view, I believe that
this
trend will bring advantages for the
country
. Sports is
trending
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tournament around the world
,
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when a
country
held
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holds
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this events
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this event
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, it
bring
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some opportunity to get more money, as we know many
people
will use many public
stuffs
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kinds of stuff
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and it will give high tax
for
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the government.
for example
, many
tourist
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tourists
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will come to that
country
and buy airplane
ticket
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tickets
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, stay in a hotel, rent a car or motorbike, buy food and drink,
shopping
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in
big
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a big
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mall,
using
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use
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public transportation and so on. It
give
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gives
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benefit
for
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to
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government
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the government
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because every public service would pay
high
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a high
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tax
for
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to
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the government. The local sellers will get more money by
sell
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selling
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their products.
in addition
, it
build
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builds
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good
coorperation
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cooperation
to
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with
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many
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any
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country
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countries
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in the world.
on the other hand
,
this
event
have
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has
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bad
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a bad
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impact, one of
it
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which
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is
increase
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thieves
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of thieves
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. Many
people
should be
carry
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carried
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on when they
in
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the
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apply
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crowds because there are many strangers that use
this events
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this event
these events
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to steal.
for example
, when many
people
is
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are
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queue
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a queue
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to
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at
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the stadium,the thief will use
this
situation to steal some
precoius
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precious
things
such
as wallet, necklace, and others.
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Task Response
Task achievement: Ensure you address all parts of the task. Clearly discuss both viewpoints and provide a reasoned conclusion that reflects your opinion. Your argument may benefit from a more balanced consideration of the opposing view and a more explicit statement of your own stance.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Work on the logical flow of your ideas, making sure each paragraph has a clear central topic. Use a range of cohesive devices appropriately to connect your ideas and paragraphs. Pay attention to paragraph structure, ensuring your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic boost
  • infrastructure
  • national pride
  • cultural showcase
  • inspire a generation
  • temporary boost
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainable planning
  • public funds
  • divert resources
  • tourism influx
  • job opportunities
  • sports development
  • public health
  • construction
  • strategic investment
  • global audience
  • hospitality
  • public services
  • cost-benefit analysis
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