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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides
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Information
Informanton
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information
 about how much families Spent their weekly income including diffident (8) groups (food, housing , fuel and power, clothing and footwear , household
goods
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, Personal
good
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goods
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, transport and Leisure) in
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
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, the proportion of expenses in 1968 is higher than
than
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that
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 (2018) . Despite
this
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, household
goods
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stay
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stayed
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 stable
in
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for
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 two years . As it is clear, the most striking element is food, it got the
highest-proportion
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highest proportion
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 in 1968 (35%).
While
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,in 2018 it is recorded
approximately
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at approximately
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 Seventeen Present.
On the other hand
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 ,
leisure
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the leisure
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 component witnessed changes which
is
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are
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dubele
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double
bubble
 around (10%) in 2018. By far, household
goods
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 recorded
identical
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an identical
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 rate over
mentioned
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the mentioned
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 Period of time (7%) .
In addition
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, housing and transport
was go
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went
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 up almost(10% ) .
However
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, fuel and Power and personal
goods
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was
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were
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 high in 1968 and it is went down in 2018 •
Finally
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 Families Spent
alot
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a lot
 of
mony
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money
in
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on
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 Clothing and footwear in 1968 which present (10%), on the one hand , the other year got (5%).
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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