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You had to cancel a meeting with a friend. Write a letter to him/her, in your letter - Apologise for cancelling the meeting - Explain why you couldn't be there - Suggest an alternative day when you could meet

Hi David, I am writing a cancellation letter of our trip for next
week
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. I was so elated when I decided to visit again for a long time.
However
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, I regret to
say
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tell
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 you that I have to postpone our tour
due
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because
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 my
uncle
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is
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has been
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 admitted
in
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to
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 the hospital
from
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for
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 two days. Suddenly my
uncle
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 was ill and he had
heart
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a heart
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 attack on Friday. I admitted to him
in
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apply
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the emergency ward and
necessary
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the necessary
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 medication was given to him
from
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by
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 the doctor.
Although
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, he came out
from
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of
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 danger but still he is in under observation. The doctor had given hope that he would recover in one
week
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.
Furthermore
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, I have to stay with him throughout the
week
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 because he has no child to look after
for
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apply
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my
uncle
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. So I
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am ashmed
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ashmed
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ashamed
aimed
 that we could not continue our plan for next
week
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. After my
uncle
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 well we could plan our tour in the next month. If it is possible for you we can plan 1st
week
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 of
coming
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the coming
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 month. I am waiting for your prompt response so we continue our trip. Best Regards,

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coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphing and ensure each paragraph contains a single main idea for better structure.Eliminate redundancy and improve overall clarity of expression.
task achievement
Remember to include all parts of the task: apologize for the cancellation, explain the situation, and suggest a new time to meet. Incorporate all these elements for a higher task achievement score.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Apologies, Regretfully, Unforeseen, Unavoidable, Commitment, Inconvenience, Remorseful
  • Reschedule, Propose, Flexibility, Accommodate, Enthusiasm
  • Looking forward, Sincerely, Best regards, Warm wishes, Catch up, Make it up to you, Make amends
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