The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009
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The table illustrates information about primary school tutors'
income
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in US Dollars in five countries in 2009. It is important to note that teachers who worked in Denmark had better salaries in minimum
years
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than others. Luxembourg teachers who had started their career with 80000 $ received 112000$ per year and
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after 30
years
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they paid 139000 which is the highest
income
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in all countries. In comparison, Koreans who had the longest period to reach a high level received 840000$ in maximum
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Japan with 34
years
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had 62400$ in
income
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.
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, Japanese folks were just under Korean at the beginning of their path with 28000$. Denmark which was higher than Korea and Japan with 47000$ had 54000$ maximum salary which was equal to its yearly
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after 8
years
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.
On the other hand
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, Australia had the same situation as Denmark in terms of yearly payment and its maximum which was 48000$ after 9
years
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, they had 34600$ salary at the beginning of their job.
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  • secondary/high school teachers
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net salary
  • cost of living
  • education funding
  • gender pay gap
  • teaching hours
  • years of experience
  • additional qualifications
  • economic indicators
  • average wage
  • currency conversion
  • educational disparities
  • international comparison
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