The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of illiterate people
by
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6 regions and by each gender
according to
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the
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data
of
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from
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last
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year.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the proportion of illiteracy of
women
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is higher
at
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every given region and over half of
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gender are not educated in Arab states and South Asia. To start with developed countries, the proportion is nearly 0 for both genders, with just
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a slight
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slight
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higher index for females. 10% of males and about 12% of females are not educated in Latin American countries and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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,
while
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under 10% of men and 20% of
women
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are
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struggle
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also
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with
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problem in East Asia and Oceania. Sub-Saharan African men's illiteracy
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just above 30%,
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women
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's index stands close to 50%. 30% of men and over 50% of
women
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are illiterate in
Arab
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the Arab
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States,
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South Asia has
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proportion of illiteracy - about 35% and 55% for males and females respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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