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You have recently been to stay with an old friend for a few days. You haven't seen each other for a long time and was happy to meet him/her. Now write a letter to this friend. In your letter: - say how you felt about the visit - refer to something enjoyable that you did while staying with him/her - invite your friend to visit you

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Dear David, Long
time
 to see you! How are doing now? I want to share
you
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with you
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 my excellent experience
while
 staying with you for
few
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a few
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 days. I was on
unplanned
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an unplanned
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 visit to
Vancoure
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Vancouver
 in Canada. It was
planned
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a planned
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 visit
of
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for
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business
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a business
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 excursion in Canada. I was travelling with my old school friend
which
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 I
have
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 met again after five years. I was searching on Instagram and suddenly found his profile. I quickly called him and enjoyed
on
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weekend nights talking about
old school
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old-school
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 days. During my
time
, he toured me to his favourite place Chilko Lake
it
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which
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 is
surrounding
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 by
glacier fed
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 and surrounded by some of the highest colourful volcanic mountains in British Columbia.
Where we
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We
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 spent one day because it was so cold
that
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at that
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time
however
, we enjoyed the cold days.
This
 place
was
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reminds me
Fairy
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of Fairy
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 Medows in Northern Pakistan and it is
world's
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the world's
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eighth highest
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eighth-highest
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 peak. I will be
cloud
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on cloud
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 nine if you can make it to Multan next month during my
parents
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parent's
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 anniversary. I can't wait
you
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to spend
time
 with you in my city so we'll plan to go to the historical places of Multan. Take care,
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greeting and closing
Ensure the letter has a clear introduction, and conclusion with appropriate greetings and sign-off phrases.
logical structure
Make sure each paragraph presents a clear idea and that the ideas are logically ordered throughout the letter.
single idea per paragraph
Discuss one central idea in each paragraph to maintain clarity and cohesion.
complete response
Address all the prompt questions thoroughly to fulfil the task requirements.
suitable writing tone
Use a tone that is suitable for the recipient and the context of the letter, maintaining formality where appropriate.
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