Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema.Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Now-a-days
cinema is more essential for humans.Because it's Correct the word
Nowadays
kind
of treatment/relaxation for those who are Correct article usage
a kind
suffered
from stress.In Wrong verb form
suffering
this
century,mobile Linking Words
phone
/Fix the agreement mistake
phones
smartphone
or Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
tablets
are available for all Use synonyms
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
people
.In Use synonyms
Linking Words
last
century,Correct article usage
the last
For watching
Change preposition
to watch
movies
,Use synonyms
people
used to go to Use synonyms
Use synonyms
theatre
.
Many Add an article
the theatre
Use synonyms
people
addicted Add a verb
people are
people were
for
smartphones and Change preposition
to
tablets
.Use synonyms
Now-a-days
OTT released Correct the word
Nowadays
movies
are available on Use synonyms
web
/OTT Correct article usage
the web
platform
.So in Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
this
case,We can watch Linking Words
movies
,Short videos,songs and Use synonyms
webseries
through Correct your spelling
web series
websites
smartphone
or tablet.The Internet service providers are offered many OTT Correct article usage
a smartphone
platform
/relevant Fix the agreement mistake
platforms
along with
mobile data recharge.Linking Words
Due to
Linking Words
unlimited
data pack,Correct article usage
the unlimited
people
maximum spent time Use synonyms
with
Change preposition
on
mobile
.So Correct pronoun usage
their mobile
theatre
works mostly over.So It's saving time Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
apply
instead
of going to Linking Words
Use synonyms
theatre
.
Some of Add an article
the theatre
other
Add an article
the other
people
said that to be fully enjoyed,films need to be seen in Use synonyms
cinema
.Correct article usage
the cinema
Now-a-days
Correct the word
Nowadays
theatre
facilities are fully digitalized.The sound setting for Use synonyms
Use synonyms
theatre
is surrounded by Correct article usage
the theatre
dolby
atmos technology and Change the capitalization
Dolby
Linking Words
also
3D technology was upgraded.A/c seats are Rephrase
apply
also
available.And Linking Words
canteen
facilities are well developed.So Correct article usage
the canteen
people
like to watch Use synonyms
movies
in Use synonyms
Use synonyms
theatre
.
In my point of Add an article
the theatre
a theatre
view
both Add a comma
view,
smartphone
or Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
tablet
and Fix the agreement mistake
tablets
Use synonyms
theatre
Fix the agreement mistake
theatres
are having
advantages to Wrong verb form
have
watch
Wrong verb form
watching
movies
,Use synonyms
webseries
,etc.But for thriller Correct your spelling
web series
movies
,It can affect health Use synonyms
while
watching in Linking Words
theatre
.But the Use synonyms
3dimensional
effects/technology Correct your spelling
3-dimensional
liked
more by Add a missing verb
is liked
children's
.
Change noun form
children
Compare
to smartphones or Wrong verb form
Compared
tablets
,Use synonyms
While
watching in Linking Words
Use synonyms
theatre
,Correct article usage
the theatre
It
has more viewing experience.So both Correct pronoun usage
apply
having
Wrong verb form
have
good
viewing experience.But Correct article usage
a good
while
watching in Linking Words
Use synonyms
theatre
,We have to spend more money compared to watching Correct article usage
the theatre
in
smartphones or Change preposition
on
tablets
.Use synonyms
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear organizational structure which makes it difficult to follow your arguments. Consider using clear paragraphing with topic sentences that introduce the main idea, followed by supporting sentences that elaborate on that idea.
task achievement
You have presented both views as the prompt requested, but your examples and explanations are limited and not fully developed. Your own opinion is also not clearly stated or elaborated on. Make sure to provide specific examples to support your points and clearly express and justify your own opinion.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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