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English Accent, Explain to me why you prefer the American accent and why Kendall Jenner is your main reason for choosing this accent.

#english #accent #american #kendall #jenner #reason
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 as a foreign language is something to be interested in learning, even though it is not easy to do. In learning
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, many teachers tried some media, methods, strategies, and techniques. Being a non-native speaker and learning
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 as a second language, it is common to have a role model,
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 as an actor or actress, through
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 to enhance language skills. The easiest way to improve our
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 is by reading a book or watching some videos or
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 shows using the imitation technique.
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 is the most important thing that must be used creatively during the teaching and learning process in order to reach the purpose of teaching. The implementation of the imitation technique in learning
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 using videos from YouTube,
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 or
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 shows could improve students’ pronunciation and listening skills.
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 or
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 shows are popular because people are great watchers. One of my
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 television shows that could help us learn
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 is Keeping Up with the Kardashians, which is documentary-style
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 based on the lives of real people and actual events recorded accurately or “fly-on-the-wall” filming, which suggests that the film crew following its stars is not seen, heard, or acknowledged by either the
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 stars or viewers. In these shows, there are five women: Kim, Khloé, Kourtney, Kylie, Kendall and their mother, Kris. They have completely redefined what it means to be famous.
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, Keeping Up with the Kardashians follows the extravagant lifestyles and surroundings of its stars. On one hand, critics widely condemn
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 show for its shallow and materialistic content, which strongly promotes consumerism and narcissism among its viewers.
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, I perceive Kendal differently in comparison to her family. She is a renowned fashion model with an exceptional voice in
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 production and a graceful
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. She is natural,
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, has never been involved in a dispute, and shields her personal life and problems from the media.
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, a visit to Kendall's Instagram would reveal that she does not consistently post her own photos,
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 to her sisters, who are essentially preoccupied with themselves. Something is peculiar about Kendall.
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, when people learn
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, they face many difficulties, including the fact that they learn by listening and that they must learn some media, techniques, and exercises. Standard American
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 is possibly the most straightforward to comprehend. The majority of us are exposed to
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 form of
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 through films, television shows, and news networks. In the UK, the Queen’s
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 and the Southern accents are probably the easiest to understand, as
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 what the BBC and many
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 use. We have the least exposure to Cornish, Lancashire, and Scottish accents, making them the hardest to understand. In conclusion, watching
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 is an efficient method of acquiring foreign languages. Learners will develop their skills in every aspect by watching, listening to, and reading the subtitles, and the cost to do so will be relatively inexpensive.
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Your essay would benefit from a clearer thesis statement in the introduction. Establishing a strong position on the preference for the American accent, framed by your experience with Kendall Jenner, would provide the reader with a solid understanding of the direction of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
The essay reveals a structure, but it lacks cohesiveness at times. While paragraphs are present, transitional phrases that link ideas and arguments coherently would strengthen the essay significantly. Include more explicit transition phrases to guide the reader through your arguments.
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While you have supported your main points with an example involving Kendall Jenner and her impact on your accent preference through television, blending more specific examples directly related to language learning, as opposed to general comments on the show's content, would enhance the depth of your essay.

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