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English Learning, I'm looking to improve our relationship by setting some boundaries. Explain how you want to be treated in these sessions, using clear examples of your own to support the answer.

In recent times, it has become evident that
English
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 is given the first priority among all other languages.
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 from every age group find
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 to be a very important barrier to maintaining a good image in society. Though
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 may result in the extinction of other regional languages, I believe that the acquisition of
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 language skills is currently very crucial. Learning and using
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 is given greater emphasis. When two individuals are involved in the
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 process, adhering to a
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 schedule is considerably simpler because they can motivate one another. By committing to shared objectives, two individuals will motivate each other to meet deadlines and reduce procrastination. They are more motivated to strive for success because they do not want to disappoint their friends. It is essential, when looking for a
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partner
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, to locate someone who has the same objectives as you.
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, it is beneficial if
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 parties are aware of their
boundaries
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. By recognising and accepting the
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 of others, they can initiate the process of contemplating ways in which they can enhance their own interpersonal relationships. A healthier, more fulfilling relationship can ultimately result from the mutual empowerment that effective
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 foster.
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, by having a mutual understanding of each other’s
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 and expectations,
both
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 parties can feel more secure and confident in the relationship. There are five areas of our lives that personal
boundaries
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 protect. The first is your love, which stands for our most fundamental capacity for trusting others and receiving trust in return. The second is your emotions. It's important for
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 to realise that they are responsible for their own feelings and shouldn't let the opinions of others dictate how they feel.
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your values:
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 is crucial for making our daily actions reflect our deepest convictions. Fourth, your behaviour addresses how we can choose our actions in social situations. The
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 is your attitude; talk about how
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 feel about
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yourself
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 and
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 partners. Considering the domains of principle, human beings have established norms to facilitate understanding and prevent misunderstandings. In the first area of love, I will trust
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 who have a distinct place in my life. To avoid confusion, the limits between companions and partners should be well defined. If we
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 have the same objective of studying, we can use the connection as a
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 buddy, discussing the topic of
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, arranging for the next
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, and nothing more.
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, if we
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 want to be more than simply companions, we have the right to inquire about each other's personal lives and future plans, including our
partner
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's self-improvement, and we can entrust them with more information about themselves.
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I believe that everyone has a right to an opinion, and I feel at ease when my
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 expresses himself openly.
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, I find it quite appreciative when my
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 respects our time together. I believe that breaking promises and not keeping time is something I don't want to do to other
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. If someone can't keep commitments and time, there's no point in starting at all.
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, regarding attitude, I am indifferent so long as an individual exhibits a pleasant and polite
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. In conclusion, if our
partner
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 is aware of the expectation and the target,
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 will have a positive impact not only on the learning process that we undertake together but
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 on their own maturation and efforts to develop for the better in the future.

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task achievement
While the essay presents a clear position throughout, the response falls short in fully addressing the set boundaries within the learning sessions. To improve, explicitly mention how the boundaries apply to the English learning context and give specific examples related to this context.
coherence cohesion
The response provides a general organization of ideas, but transitions between them are not always smooth, and the connection among paragraphs could be stronger. To improve coherence, use more cohesive devices to link ideas within and across paragraphs clearly, ensuring a smooth flow of information.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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