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You have recently moved into new home. You are planning for a party. However, you are worried about the noise which may disturb your neighbour. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter - Introduce yourself - invite your neighbour - describe the planning of the party and express your concern

#home #party #noise #neighbour #concern
Dear Sir or Madam Hope you and your family doing great. Well, let me introduce
my self
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myself
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. I am Sam your new neighbour, I live in
new
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a new
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 house at 16
park
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Park
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. I felt
gratefull
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grateful
to
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for
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 living in
this
 environment
,
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 because
in
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it
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 here
a
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the
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quite
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quietest
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 place I ever had. Actually, I planned to invite my old friends because we have
long
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 time no see.
Therefore
, I am thinking
to
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of
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make
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having
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 a party at my house, but I am worried about the sound
produce
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produced
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. I would like to invite you and your
familly
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family
 to join
with
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me and my old friends, I
also
 will invite another neighbour.
Moreover
if
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you be able to
introduced
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 me to the neighbours. I can't wait to meet you and other
neighboars
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neighbours
. Best
regads
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regards
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and fully expands on it to support your main purpose.
coherence cohesion
Use a more structured approach to organize your paragraphs and ideas logically.
coherence cohesion
The greeting is appropriate, but consider personalizing the closure with your full name for a more formal touch.
task achievement
The response completes the task, but include more specific details about the party (time, what to expect) and express your concerns about noise in a more detailed manner.
task achievement
Use a tone that is consistently polite and considerate throughout the letter, and try to make your sentences structured to enhance clarity and formality.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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