Some people say that it is not possible to be happy without money while other things that money does not guarantee happiness. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

Although
Money
can'
t
buy happiness,
but
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still many people believe that one cannot be happy without
money
where
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as
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whereas
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other believes that
money
does not doesn'
t
guarantee happiness. In my essay, I shall discuss
about
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both views, followed by some supportive examples. In today's modern world, everything has become so expensive to lead a happy
life
. It totally depends upon the level of income a person is earning.Even
to lead
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a basic
life
costs, an arm and leg.A person with a good financial condition can avail all
comforts
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the comforts
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and facilities in
life
whereas
it is totally opposite in
case
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the case
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of a person who doesn'
t
earn enough.To demonstrate, a survey
was
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conducted by the students of marketing
of
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GNA University revealed that 73% of people cannot buy certain facilities
due to
low
level
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levels
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of income.
On the other hand
,it is believed by many that
money
doesn'
t
guarantee happiness. Nowadays, children have to leave their
home
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to create
the
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future and be financially strong but in all
this
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they forget about their parents or the families who are waiting for them
indeed
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. many times it is noticed that individuals compensate
their
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presence by sending a
little
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small
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amount of
money
to their parents. It might be
the
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gesture to support them financially .To exemplify, One of my close friends who is living in England, couldn'
t
come to her father's
last
rights just to secure her future. In
nutshell
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, I believe that
Money
is a supportive agent in every individual's
life
, and so it should be treated
accordingly
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task achievement
Although you have presented both sides of the argument, the development of ideas needs to be more fully realized. Make sure that you expand on your main points with sufficient development and detail, and include more specific examples to strengthen your arguments.

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