The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.

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of
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in a UK university from 1999 to 2003. The university
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came from European Nations,
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East, and Africa.
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an increase
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trends over the period
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the
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of European Nations
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indicates
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a decline.
According to
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from European countries reached a peak at 35.000.
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, the number constantly declined and reached
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lowest point by 2003 at around 10.000.
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from
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East displayed a rise from 15.000 in 1999 to 30.000 in 2003, which doubled the
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numbers. Africa
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a period of stability between 1999 and 2001 at roughly 2.500 candidates, it was the lowest
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compared to
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other regions. The
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area to be mentioned is
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east
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which had
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trends over the period, in 2001 15.000
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from
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decline
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by 2.500 of margin in 2002. The proportion
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rose again and reached 20.000
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at its
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highest point.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words applicants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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