61.The table and pie show the total value and sources of fish imports to the UK from 1990 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table and pie chart display the total price and the countries from, which it came, of fish imported to the UK in the 10-year period from 1990 to 2000.
Overall
, the biggest value was in the year of 2000.
Also
, the sources constantly
were changing
Wrong verb form
change
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in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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percentage through the years.
Firstly
, the costs increased in
this
particular period, from nearly 6,5 billion in 1988 to merely over 8,5 billion in 1992.
Then
, it
also
slightly grew up to almost 11 billion in 2000.
Secondly
, Canada took roughly 70% out of all sources in 1988,
although
then
, it dramatically decreased to 34% in the next given year.
Finally
, it ended up with just under 30% in 2000.
In contrast
, two other categories pushed out Canada and grew up.
For instance
, the starting point of China was just a quarter out of the whole pie chart,
however
in the following years it rose to almost 40% in 2000.
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