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The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The picture illustrates how much data on
police
 cost between 2017 to 2018 in the UK,
while
 the pie charts represent the
income
. The table
prove
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provides
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 data about how
budget
Correct article usage
the budget
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come
Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
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;
whereas
 the pie charts show how the
money
 was spent.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the total
income
 of an average
british
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British
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 family increased between 2017 to 2018,
the
Correct word choice
and the
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amounth
Correct your spelling
amount
 of
police
Correct article usage
the police
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budget
 on
souncers
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soldiers
 increased.
Additonally
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Additionally
,
british
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British
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police
 spent much more
money
 on
income
 decreased by the same token period.
According to
 the table,
in
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from
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 2017 to 2018,
an
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the
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 sum of
police
 British
spend
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spending
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money
 was
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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at
Change preposition
from
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 304.7m to 318.6m. The National
Goverment
Correct your spelling
government
 of
police
budget
was rise
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rose
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at
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from
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 175.5m to 177.8m,
similarly
 to the local taxes went up to 102. from 91.2m.
Likewise
, the other sources of
police
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the police
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budget
was go
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went
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 up to 0,5m from 38m. Regarding the pie charts, the
income
 of how the cost was
spendt
Correct your spelling
spent
 was fall
at
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from
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 75% to 69%during the period.
However
, the technology of how the
money
 was spent
go
Wrong verb form
went
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 up
at
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by
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 8% to 14% from 2017 to 2018.
In addition
, the similarity the number of people who spent
money
for
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on
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 building and
transport
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transporting
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 similar
stend
Correct your spelling
stand
 at 17%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, income, budget, money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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