Many people live in towns and cities where there are museums that promote historical and artistic objects of cultural importance, but they don't visit them. Why do you think many people don't visit museums? What is the cultural importance of museums to society?
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coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear introduction and conclusion, presenting the main topics and summarizing the key points respectively. The current essay lacks a succinct thesis statement and conclusive summary.
coherence cohesion
Develop a logical structure with clear progression of ideas. Use paragraphs effectively, each discussing a separate idea with appropriate supporting sentences.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with detailed and relevant examples. Abstract statements should be supported by specific instances or data to strengthen the argument.
task achievement
Fully address all parts of the task, presenting a clear position throughout the response. Expand on the cultural importance of museums to society, as the essay does not entirely cover this aspect of the prompt.
task achievement
Develop clear and comprehensive ideas. Generally, the ideas should be well-explained, but more depth and analysis are expected to thoroughly cover the topic at hand.
coherence cohesion
Use a mixture of simple and complex sentence structures with adequate precision. Avoid grammatical errors and ensure correct word choices.
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