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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
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The provided graph indicates the differences in population proportion who were born inside or outside
Australia
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 spending lives in urban, rural or town in the interval between a period of 15 years from 1995.
Overall
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, it is observed that the percentage of citizens were maintained to be the highest data compared to the others, whether they were born in or out of
Australia
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 in both illustrated period. Regarding the proportion of people who were born in
Australia
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, 50% and 65% in the following 1995 and 2010,
whereas
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 inhabitants who were born in town were 20% and 18% in the durations respectively.
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, as opposed to the others, the allotment was marginally high in 1995 at 30% but only 18% in 2010.
On the other hand
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, with respect to dwellers who were born outside
Australia
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, the percentages in 2 different timelines were the same with both 60%. In terms of people living in towns, 15% were displayed continually,
while
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 living in rural areas significantly 40% in 1995 and 10% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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