Some people prefer to buy local commodities, while others think that world wide products have a better quality. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Consuming local
products
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has become a discussion these days, some believe people should buy domestic
commodities
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while
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others think that
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an
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international
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products
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product
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is
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the better choice. I will discuss both views and share my own opinion related to
this
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topic. On the one hand, buying local
commodities
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is important to boost local
enterprenuer
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entrepreneur
entrepreneurs
business. Most of the small enterprises are struggling to sell their
products
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in current economic situations
due to
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competition and
inflations
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inflation
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.
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, in the post-pandemic era, local
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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production
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producers
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are having
problem
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problems
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in selling their
products
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due to
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the competition with many
imports
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imported
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product
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products
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. In
this
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case, making a campaign to push people to buy local
commodities
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is
become
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important so they can keep
survive
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surviving
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and develop their
products
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.
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, it is undeniable that
world wide
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worldwide
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products
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offer high quality and cheap things to the
market
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. That become the main reason
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its popularity, foreign
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products
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products are
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also
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easy to find as it has many stocks for the
market
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.
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, most
of
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electronics
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products
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are currently distributed from China as they have many
manufacturer
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manufacturers
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and
technology
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technologies
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which not available in Indonesia. They can
sale
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sell
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their
products
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with
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at
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compressed
price
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prices
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and free delivery service to attract people's attention. In conclusion, buying local
products
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could be a symbol of
supports
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support
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to local
business
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businesses
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as they need to grow and compete in the
market
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while
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world
wid
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wide
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product offers better prices and services. I personally
belive
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believe
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that supporting local
commodities
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will
benefits
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more in the future as we need to grow as
more
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a more
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independent nation and compete in
global
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the global
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market
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task achievement
Be sure to directly address the prompt throughout your essay - directly state which view you agree with in your conclusion.
task achievement
Work on the development of your ideas so that each paragraph centers around one clear main idea; avoid introducing multiple ideas within a single paragraph without sufficient elaboration.
coherence cohesion
Ensure logical progression from one paragraph to the next using a variety of cohesive devices and transition words.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to directly answer the essay prompt in your conclusion by stating your own opinion clearly, and ensure that your opinion is consistent with the rest of your essay.
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Provide specific examples that directly support your main points to demonstrate clarity in your arguments.
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