Instructions: You have 40 minutes to write your answer. Discuss the implications of the growing influence of artificial intelligence on the education system in 2023. Consider the potential advantages and disadvantages, and provide examples or evidence to support your points. Write at least 250 words.

Today, with the growth of internet accessibility to us, more and more society
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attention to the current innovation named Artificial Intelligence (AI). The increasing intelligence of technology should bring some benefits, including in
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system and help
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to learn more in their school.
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of the use of AI is the easiness it offers. It allows students to attend classes online
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take the test from their
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. The innovation provides
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system that could check if the participant
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the test correctly. It
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and minimize the possible human error that might happen. Not everything,
however
, about the introduction of AI into
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system is beneficial. On the downside, many people fear that the seamless of
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technology will result
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a threat
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humankind. One of
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technology
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technologies
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that is
commonly used by university students is chatGPT.
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assignment
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using its
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in
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short time. Many
teachers
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afraid the assignment
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not done individually by their own capability and competence. Should the rules
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given to the student, the fraud that might be
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could be resolved.
To conclude
, there are more advantages than disadvantages of using artificial intelligence to support education activities. Despite
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the controversy that might
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its popularity and promising innovation will increase more and more in the future.
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introduction conclusion present
The essay adequately introduces the topic and provides a conclusion. However, the introduction does not clearly state your position or preview the main points of discussion, which impacts coherence. The conclusion needs to be stronger and more reflective of the essay's content.
logical structure
There is a logical sequence of information with some clear progression of ideas. However, the connection between ideas could be strengthened with better use of cohesive devices. The use of paragraphs is appropriate, but transitions between them can be improved for a more seamless flow.
supported main points
Some of the main points are supported by explanations or examples, but these are not always developed sufficiently. To achieve a higher score, include more specific examples and details that directly support your argument. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, elaborated in depth.
complete response
The response to the task is adequate, addressing the implications of AI on education, as well as its advantages and disadvantages. However, your response would benefit from a clearer, more direct answer to the question with a stronger thesis statement.
clear comprehensive ideas
Your essay provides some ideas and argumentation on the topic but lacks depth and detail. Improve this by adding more comprehensive explanations and avoiding superficial treatment of the subject matter. Develop each point fully, ensuring ideas are clear and expanded upon.
relevant specific examples
There is some use of relevant examples like the reference to 'chatGPT,' but these are not explored in depth and do not strongly support the argument. Use more specific examples and evidence to illustrate your points and add credibility to your discussion.

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