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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Humans a social beings and
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 is proven by many philosophers in their study of human behaviour. As a
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 a based dwellers
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 have some nose to
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live
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 in the
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 for being a good representative of it it starts with the offspring by teaching them those rules of the
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 whether from their guardians or from an educational institution. In my point of view, I think
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 are the best teachers of those communal rules by themselves at home.
Parents
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 being responsible members of
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community
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, automatically reflect on their offspring. Because
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 are like copycats.They copy everything
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 shown by their
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. Most of the time
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 spend their time with their
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 at home.
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, guardians can practice simple social norms with their
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 so that they start their process of being good members of
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.
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 can't stay stable in a single place, they are always on the run for playing or doing something.
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,
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 need to inject good things into them whenever they are playing and doing something. Making it fun for them is the responsibility of a
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parent parents
 not to pressurize.
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, school may be a good place to learn things but not the best place for learning social norms to be a good representative of the
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. In educational institutions etiquette and manners are taught but there is always a gap when it comes to one-to-one interaction. One person cannot put things individually by giving so much effort that's why school teaches Academics well but not those communal methods to be a responsible person. Considering the above-mentioned views it can be concluded that
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parents
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 should groom their offspring with good etiquette and manners at home to be the best version of themselves for
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. I think without personal care it is not possible to make our offspring responsible members of the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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