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The table and charts below gve information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below gve information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table provides
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 data about the sources of
budget
 about
budget
 coming from three different means;
whereas
, the pie charts show how the money was spent.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the total income of an average
british
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 family increased between 2017 to 2018.
Additionally
, British
police
 spent
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much
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money on salaries/wages.
According to
 the table,
in
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from
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 2017 to 2018, the total amount of spending
of
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police
 British increased from 304.7m to 318.6m. The National
Government of
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police
budget
 rose between 175.5m and 177.8m,
similarly
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 to the local taxes with 102m in 2017 and 91.2m in 2018.
Likewise
, the other sources of
police
budget
 went up to 38,5m from 38m. Regarding the pie charts, the income of how the cost was spent fell from 75% to 69% during the period.
However
,expenditure on
the
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technology went up
14
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% in 2018. The number of people who spent money on building and transport remained stable
`at
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at
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 17%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, police, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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