You said you would attend your best friend's birthday party, but you did not go. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter apologise for not going explain why you were not there, say how you will make up for it.

Dear Alex, I hope you find my letter in the best of spirits. I'm writing
this
letter to convey my apologies for my absence from your
birthday
party. When I received your invitation to attend your
birthday
party, I was so excited to join.
This
is the golden chance to meet all our college friends after a long time. But unfortunately, a day before your
birthday
, I fell down from few stairs, and my right knee got hurt very badly.
This
is the reason I was not able to be a part of your
birthday
celebrations. On the one side where I feel sorry for my absence, I would
also
like to take
this
opportunity to make
this
birthday
special for you as
along with
this
letter, I sent you the iPhone watch. I know you are fond of iPhone products, and the
last
time we spoke, you told me about your plan to buy the iPhone watch. So, I'm pleased to get
this
opportunity to share your joy. I hope that you will understand my situation, and will be happy with the present I bought for you. Yours truly, Alicia
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You started your letter with an appropriate greeting and ended with a proper closing, maintaining a suitable format. However, it would benefit from more varied sentence structures to enhance flow and interest.
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