You said you would attend your best friend's birthday party, but you did not go. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter apologise for not going explain why you were not there, say how you will make up for it.

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Dear Alex, I hope you find my letter in the best of spirits. I'm writing

this

letter to convey my apologies for my absence from your

birthday

party. When I received your invitation to attend your

birthday

party, I was so excited to join.

This

is the golden chance to meet all our college friends after a long time. But unfortunately, a day before your

birthday

, I fell down from few stairs, and my right knee got hurt very badly.

This

is the reason I was not able to be a part of your

birthday

celebrations. On the one side where I feel sorry for my absence, I would

also

like to take

this

opportunity to make

this

birthday

special for you as

along with

this

letter, I sent you the iPhone watch. I know you are fond of iPhone products, and the

last

time we spoke, you told me about your plan to buy the iPhone watch. So, I'm pleased to get

this

opportunity to share your joy. I hope that you will understand my situation, and will be happy with the present I bought for you. Yours truly, Alicia

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Coherence and Cohesion

You started your letter with an appropriate greeting and ended with a proper closing, maintaining a suitable format. However, it would benefit from more varied sentence structures to enhance flow and interest.

Task Achievement

While you did address all parts of the task prompt, expanding on your main ideas with more detail and developing your explanation in the second paragraph could further improve your response. Consider adding distinct examples or consequences of your actions to elaborate.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

191 words

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