Increase the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Iran and Iraq is the number 1 supplier of
crude
oil
to India.
Petrol
segregates and separates from
crude
oil
.It's a lengthy process.The
government
is determining the
price
of
petrol
on a daily basis and
also
determining the
price
of diesel. Day by day
petrol
prices were increasing gradually.
Petrol
price
is based on How much is imported from Iran and Iraq.
Petrol
is essential for running vehicles on a regular basis.Not
only
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the
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increasing the
price
of
petrol
is the best way to solve
growing
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the growing
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traffic and pollution.
Instead
of that We have to use public transport for journeys or travelling.
While
seeing practically,Increase the
price
of
petrol
,People went for cost reduction for
petrol
usage.So compared to the previous trend,traffic was reduced.It could reduce noise pollution.Recently in
Srilanka
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Sri Lanka
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,the Public
affected
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was affected
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by Insufficient
petrol
and diesel.The public has to avoid unnecessary travel or
journey
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while
increasing the
petrol
price
.Awareness programs should be conducted by the
Government
/traffic police department.Already smoke test was conducted by
government
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the government
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for each and every vehicle that uses
petrol
or
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diesel or gas. I agree that
government
involvement in the control of air pollution is good. For
the
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example,Reliance is taking
crude
oil
from the land of North India and
also
in
south
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India.Earth itself contains
crude
oil
at the depth. How much
crude
oil
is produced from the native country and how much import/export happening is important.The
government
is responsible for the measurement of
crude
oil
levels for daily usage.
Government
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The government
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has to monitor
crude
oil
transporting/Importing or exporting through ships.
Government
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The government
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has to measure other import/export items for
petrol
-providing countries.The Ministry of Petroleum and
natural gas
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Natural Gas
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is responsible for
this
.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear structure with an identifiable introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction should clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement and present a thesis statement. Both the introduction and conclusion need to succinctly present the main points of the essay. Ensure that each paragraph has a central idea, and this idea is elaborated with sufficient detail and examples. Use cohesive devices appropriately to create a logical flow of ideas.
task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the prompt, but you must provide a clear opinion on the statement regarding petrol prices and discuss this throughout the essay. Include a range of ideas with examples to support your argument or your position on disagreeing, as the question asks directly 'To what extent do you agree or disagree?' Consider developing each idea thoroughly with clear explanation and support. Additionally, when suggesting alternative measures, offer specific examples or evidence to enhance the effectiveness of your arguments.

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