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Everyone need to study until the age of 18? Discuss and give your opinion

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In the new era, most humans believe that education plays an important role in their lives and
people
 should start acquiring
knowledge
 from a young
age
 and continue it at least until the
age
 of 18 to acquire the necessary skills for life. In
this
 essay, I am going to express my opinion about why all
people
 should study until the
age
 of 18. in the beginning, I will discuss the subject that the speed of progress in the recent century is very high. , so, all the
people
 in every country should through schools acquire
knowledge
 between the ages of 7 and 18 to
finally
 with enough
knowledge
 to prepare for entering university or the labour market. Having an average level of
knowledge
 for all
people
 the country brings progress to economics, science and social welfare.
Although
 studying has never been compulsory for humans, by watching history we understand that undeveloped countries
for instance
 Venezuela have always been left behind
due to
 illiterate
people
, and not having a strong economy and sufficient welfare and medical facilities creates hassle for them. In conclusion, humans live better and are used to advances in modern technology, they should study at least until the
age
 of 18 years old of course my opinion in the new
age
 generation studying until the
age
 of 18 and having an average
knowledge
 should be established by policymakers as a law in countries.
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