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The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.
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The line graph gives data about the changes in
temperature
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 in three cities namely Paris,
Dubai
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 and
Sydney
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 in different
months
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 of the year.
Temperature
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 is measured in Celsius
degrees
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.
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it is clear that
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Dubai
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 and Paris have comparatively warmer weather between April and August
whereas
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 an opposite trend is witnessed in
Sydney
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 during the first two and
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 two
months
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 of the year which has the highest
temperature
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 .
Initially
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, the
temperature
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 in
Sydney
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 is 25
degrees
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 in January which is the warmest month of the year.Following
months
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, the
temperature
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 in
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 country decreased steadily from March to June.
Next,
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especially, in July the
temperature
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 here declined by 12
degrees
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 which was the coldest month .
However
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 , in August the
temperature
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 in
Sydney
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 grew noticeably to 2y
degrees
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 until December.
Moreover
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, in
Dubai
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, the
temperature
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 was 20
degrees
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 and
this
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 rate went out until August .
This
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 month was the peak
temperature
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 in
Dubai
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. It was 37
degrees
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.
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Although
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 the next
months
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 , weather conditions in
this
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 city drop dramatically. In December, it was 26
degrees
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 here.
Nevertheless
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 ,
Dubai
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 was the warmest country among the given countries.
Furthermore
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, in Paris, the
temperature
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 was 5
degrees
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 at the beginning.
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, it increased respectively until June and reached as high as 20
degrees
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 between July and August . After that, it decreased by 4
degrees
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 and in December the
temperature
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 was the lowest weather in
Dubai
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, dubai, sydney, months, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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