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Map the maps below describe an area before and after the construction of a hydroelectric power plant

Map the maps below describe an area before and after the construction of a hydroelectric power plant
The maps illustrate a zone before and after
establishment
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the establishment
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 of a geothermal power plant
Overall
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,there are some new changes in the area with the appearance of the lake.
Moreover
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, the other end of the map has a new hotel building which replaces the old farmland in the first map.
To begin
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 with, The most important change is that several new things have been done to the lake next to it.
First,
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a bridge was built to the left, a power plant was built, and
instead
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 of a historical castle, the transmission towers were built, and on the right,
instead
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 of an agricultural hotel, a hotel was built.
Besides
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, the river
were
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was
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 widened in its mid-segment to store water.
Therefore
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,the national park was completely destroyed
Whereas
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, villages in the southeast region and the north forest and the mountains remained the same on both maps when compared.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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