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Examine the arguments in favour and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. You should use your own ideas, knowledge, and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In the world of technology and medicine, animal experiments have become a norm. It is an important practice before any finalization of a
drug
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 or any other practical experiment.
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, it is beneficial to test any new
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 on
animals
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 before
human
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,
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, it is
inhuman
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 and dangerous for animal's life.
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 will discuss both the points and present a conclusion on the issue. On one hand, scientists believe it is a necessary step before any human trial in order to avoid any dangerous aspect of the medicine. It shows how the
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 is processed within the body of an animal which allows researchers to understand the minor or major side effects.
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, in animal
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trials
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 it is made sure that no dangerous experimentation can be performed on any subject and if any harsh effect is noticed the trial is immediately discontinued. Since
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 it is for the effectiveness of the experiment, the animal health is much of a consideration during the whole process.
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, in the pharmacy labs, rats are used for
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trials
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 and there is a proper animal habitat created for them to thrive in a natural way.
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, people find it
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an animal
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 to perform any test on them as
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 are not
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non-living
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. An animal is unable to speak of the pain and torture when any experiment takes place. It seems like a forceful, torturous and worse thing to do as a human on any other living being
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such
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 experiments must carry out in other ways simply by replacing
animals
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 with more processing and
trials
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.
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, lab rats were called in for a
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 trial for
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thesis research in order to avoid spending extra funds on
formulation
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 of the
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, it is a cruel initiative to save money and use
animals
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 for experiments which are willingly performed. In conclusion, it is an undeniable fact that
animals
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 all over the world have been used for lab
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 irrespective of the after-effect
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this
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 cause.
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, it somehow holds importance as human life can not be thrown under the bridge and so
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animals
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 are required.
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,
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 can be done wisely by passing all the other possible processing and transitions, there needs to be a standard created in each lab which should be imposed and
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 it should be made available for animal
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and your stance on it, while the conclusion effectively summarizes your arguments and restates your position.
logical structure
Work on developing a clear and logical structure by organizing your arguments into well-defined paragraphs, each containing one clear main idea with subsequent supporting sentences.
supported main points
When making points, always support them with specific examples or evidence to strengthen your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic. Avoid vague assertions.
complete response
Make sure the essay addresses the task fully by discussing both sides of the argument and providing a clear conclusion that reflects your overall stance on the issue.
clear comprehensive ideas
Strive to express your ideas clearly and comprehensively. Ensure that each paragraph flows logically to the next, and use cohesive devices effectively to enhance readability.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate examples that are directly relevant to your arguments and tie them back to the main points you are discussing. Specificity adds authenticity and credibility to your essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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