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The number of international conferences in three cities.

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The chart illustrates the
number
 of foreign
conferences
 organized in several cities from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the quantity of international
conferences
 hosted in
city
 A, and
city
 B witnessed a downward trend, the opposite trend was true for
city
C
.
In addition
, the volume of overseas
conferences
 in
city
C
 was the lowest between 1980 and 1990. In 1980, the
number
 of global
meeting
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meetings
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 in
city
 A was the highest in all three
city
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cities
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 about 35
conferences
, compared to 0
conferences
 in
city
C
. After 15 years, the figure for
city
 A decreased significantly to 24
conferences
, and
continue
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declined
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to decline
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 rapidly to 20
conferences
 by 2010. The
number
 of international
conferences
 in
city
C
 saw an upward trend at 16
conferences
 in 1985
,
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 and decreased slightly five years later before peaking at 35
conferences
 in 1995. The figure for
city
C
 dropped minimally in 2000, and there was a
slightly
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 increase over a
ten year
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 period at 29
conferences
. In 1980, the
number
 of international
conferences
 in
city
 B was the second among
three
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 cities. The figure for
city
 B decreased dramatically from 24
conferences
 to 18
conferences
 before
grewing
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growing
 slightly over the
five year
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 period. After 15 years, there was a gradual decline at 15
conferences
.
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