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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

#people #development
The cutting-edge technology in the
shooping
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shopping
 lifestyle
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 popular for numerous
people
 around the world. The
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 tendency to afford stuff on
daily
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a daily
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 basis is online.
This
increase
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 trend
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this
 online-based
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 lifestyle has brought both benefits and shortcomings
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during its development. First of all, as far as I can say, there are two imperative things that phenomenon
make
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posible
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possible
 as the advantages to it.
Firstly
, buying what
people
 truly need through smartphone or computer
application
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applications
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 has cut the time-consuming off. The
people
 allocate their time to
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quality-time
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quality time
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spending
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 with loving family
instead
 of going out of
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.
Next,
the price
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offered
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 online varies
as well as
 the level of
products
' quality.
This
 urges the
buyers
 to apply their multiple choices.
A
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 freedom to opt
what
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for what
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 they need is plausibly foundation
to
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 every consumer. The option which opens
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the opportunity
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 to
the
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shooping
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shopping
 users will be economically adjusted.
Secondly
,
however
, the number of online
buyers
 going up
time
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 to time
also
 contributes to the negative impacts. One of
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 many disadvantages is killing the conventional shops. The existence of the local stores is
thretened
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threatened
. When
the
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buyers
 prefer staying at home to open their smartphones to buy
products
, the conservative and settled stores will be extinct,
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which they directly affect
the
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economic matters in general.
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Furthermore
, the
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 important shotcoming caused by that global issue is the local product which is unable to compete with affordable and massive stuff in the technological application which can
easly
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easily
accesses
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 by the
buyers
 themselves.
Hence
,
the
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consumers will prefer buying
the
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internet-based-
products
instead
 of
the
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local
products
. In summary, the incline number of
people
 buying something
via
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online
cause
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 either
the
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good news or
the
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bad information to 
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 society.
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