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Some people argue that the purpose of zoos is only to entertain people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Zoos
 are primarily used for entertaining individuals,
however
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 there is an ongoing debate that
zoos
 are only used to entertain and there is no other significance. I strongly disagree with the statement, and the reasons are as follows.
To begin
 with, there is no doubt that
zoos
 are to entertain people as they have numerous
species
 displayed for the visitors. People around the world come to see these rare birds and animals, their history and their lifestyle. Many
of
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different
zoos
 are equipped with different
species
 which are not found in other
zoos
, which becomes the attraction point for the visitors to explore the
species
 they have never seen.
On the other hand
, apart from entertainment, they
also
 provide immense information related to the
species
 and the diversity of wildlife.
Additionally
, they help to educate children and to provide vital information related to rare
species
.
For example
, children only learn about these animals and birds in their books but these
zoos
 help to learn better about them. Watching them in real life makes a remarkable impression and a lifetime memory.
Moreover
, many environmental issues are arising which is the reason for habitat destruction.
Hence
,
zoos
 are participating actively in conservation efforts and protecting various
species
. They are
also
 helping to grow and breed the rare
species
.
For instance
, a recent study shows that a few
zoos
 reported
in
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 increase of various
tiger
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 and other rare
species
 in their
zoos
.
In addition
 to the
effort
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 India brought cheetahs from South Africa recently, which is a special
species
 that was not available in India earlier.
To conclude
, I would like to assert that, with all the above information
it is clear that
zoos
 are multipurpose
place
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 to entertain, educate and
to
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protect
the
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various
species
.
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