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The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first
diagram
 illustrates four steps of silkworm's life and the second
diagram
 depicts stages of
silk
 cloth manufacturing. At the very first
stage
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stage,
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 a mature moth lays its eggs from which silkworm
larvae's
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larvae
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 hatch after
ten-day
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a ten-day
the ten-day
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 period. During the second
stage
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stage,
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 the only thing that these creatures do implies feeding on mulberry leaves and gaining strength. It takes leaves between 4 and 6 weeks before they start covering with
silk
thread
.
This
 process ends up approximately in 6-8 days when the larves completely hide in their cocoons from which adult moths appear in 15 days and the whole process renews. An interesting detail in
this
diagram
 is that cocoons,
that
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which
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 are considered to be the fourth
stage
 of
silkworm's
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the silkworm's
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 life cycle, are used in
production
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the production
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 of
silk
 cloth which includes five phases.
Firstly
, the selected cocoon is put into the water where it is boiled for some time. At the following
stage
,
steamed
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the steamed
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 cocoon is unwinded in order to obtain a
thread
which
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whose
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 length varies from 300 metres to 900 metres. The next step can include both twisting a new
thread
 or weaving it.
According to
 the
diagram
,
this
 process is finished when twisted or
weaved
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woven
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 threads are dyed.
Overall
, it can be seen that both diagrams are
conected
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connected
 with each other because the production of
silk
 cloth becomes possible
as a consequence
 of larvas' activity of covering into
silk
thread
.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Silkworm (Bombyx mori)
  • Sericulture
  • Egg
  • Larva/larvae
  • Cocoon
  • Moth
  • Mulberry leaves
  • Pupa/pupae
  • Spinning
  • Weaving
  • Dyeing
  • Silk threads
  • Silk cloth
  • Life cycle
  • Metamorphosis
  • Harvesting
  • Domestication
  • Natural fibers
  • Textile industry
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