Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training) Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

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times, skill migration has become
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emigrant increases. There are those who say that
doctors
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and engineers should
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in the
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where they trained,
while
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others believe that it should be free to choose
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. In
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both arguments and give my
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opinion. Generally speaking,
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like
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is considered holy
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and &
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the
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country
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is patriotism. Perhaps, there
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the main reason is that we live in a
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where we need
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and engineers.
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, Bangladesh
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not sufficient
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but health is a basic need here. If
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are seeking to migrate
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, Bangladeshi rural people will suffer more here as already we have below per doctor in hospitals. Another reason
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they should
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country
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government
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has huge
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those
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two sectors.
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provides free education and hopes they serve their
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in future.
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is not only a profession but
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of
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a
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.
On the other hand
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, Some people believe
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and
engineer
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should
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to choose their
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work place
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where they wish because everyone has
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to choose their own lifestyle, those people want to improve their lifestyle and personal skills by
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.It helps them to improve their financial condition, followed by
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education and family financial condition.
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, some student
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are doing their training
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as they
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not proper facilities
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on
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engineering
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sectors
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. They want to go back
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own
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and
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for
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. As an example, Bangladeshi
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students
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very limited facilities to get training
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to build a
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heritage
building. When a student study abroad, some of them are keen to
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for their own
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that's why they Should
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to choose their
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work station
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In conclusion,
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Government
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cannot force
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to stay and
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for them
whereas
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they will more benefits from
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. In my opinion,
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and
engineer
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engineers
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should be free to
work
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in
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as they will improve their skills by doing
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with other communities and it gives them
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strong financial support in most of the developed
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country
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countries
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.
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, if
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government
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ensure a strong earning source and
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them by giving
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a
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improve
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lifestyle in
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then
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their decision to go abroad.
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coherence cohesion
The essay presents both sides of the argument and reflects some level of coherence, yet the structure of the argument could be clearer. It is important to present each point systematically, ensuring a logical flow that makes it easy for the reader to follow the argument throughout the essay. Consider introducing each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that summarises the main idea of the paragraph, followed by support and examples.
task achievement
While the essay attempts to address the task, there are instances of unclear or incomplete ideas, which may confuse the reader. Ensure that each point made directly contributes to answering the question, with a sufficient depth of explanation and more relevant examples. Focus on developing each point fully before moving on to the next. The conclusion should encapsulate the writer's final opinion in a coherent manner, reflecting on the arguments made in the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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