The table shows the proportion of pupils attending for Secondary school types between 2000 and 2009

The table shows the proportion of pupils attending for Secondary school types between 2000 and 2009
The table
compare
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compares
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four different types of Secondary
schools
in terms of
proportion
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the proportion
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of
students
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student
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attendance.
Overall
,
it is clear that
proportion
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the proportion
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of
students
attended
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who attended
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in
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Community
Schools
increased dramatically
while
those of Specialist
schools
, Grammar
schools
and
Voluntary- controlled
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voluntary-controlled
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schools
saw
vary
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level
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levels
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of decreases over the 9-year period. It
also
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worth noting that in 2000 Voluntary-controlled
schools
were the most popular for pupils but by the end of
period
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the period
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,
Community
schools
had taken the lead. In 2000, Voluntary- controlled
schools
were the most popular choice among the
students
with figures of 52%.
This
was followed by the Grammar
schools
which provided 24% of
total
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amount of
students
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student
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attendance.Specialist and
Community
schools
were shown the same percentage at 12% by given the years. By the end of
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period
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students
of
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Community
schools
had seen a
dramatically
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rise to 58%. Other
schools
of proportion namely: Specialists
schools
, Voluntary-controlled and Grammar
schools
had been declined in 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, students, community with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.

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