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You are working for an international company and you would like to request time off for a family event. Write a letter to your boss: ● explaining what the celebration is ● asking for the time off ● explaining how you can get work done when you take time off

#company #request #time #event #boss #celebration #work
Dear Jack I am writing to
this
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inquire
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time
 off.My name is Sardor and I am worker your company.I have been working in
this
 company for 2 years and
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 never asked ,
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time
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 off’’ ,so
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 am first
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 asking
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 off
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 because next Monday my
cousin
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 wedding day and I have to
going
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 her wedding. Could you give me
further
 documents for
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 off
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 I
couldn’t
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working
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time
off’’because
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off because
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 weekend
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 don’t think
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 works but I have one friend and he can help me
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 work. I will
wait
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 your reply
for
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. Yours faithfully Sardor Salimjonov
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greeting and closing
Ensure that you open and close your letter with appropriate formalities. Instead of 'Dear Jack', use a more formal address such as 'Dear Mr. [Last Name]' when writing to your boss. Instead of 'Yours faithfully', ensure that you end with 'Sincerely' if you know the name of the person you are writing to.
logical structure
Work on creating a clear logical structure. Organize your letter into at least three distinct paragraphs: an introduction stating the purpose of the letter, a body paragraph elaborating on the request, and a conclusion with a restatement of your request and thanks.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should contain a single clear idea. First, introduce the purpose of the letter and your general request. Then, explain the details and context of the request. Lastly, mention how your work will be managed during your absence. Do not mix these points in the same paragraph.
complete response
Make sure you respond fully to all aspects of the task. Include the name of the celebration, why it is important for you to be there, and the exact dates you are requesting off. Offer a solution for handling work during your absence, and express willingness to assist with any necessary arrangements before your leave.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a formal and respectful tone throughout the letter, suitable for communication with a superior at work. Avoid casual language and phrases that are too informal for professional correspondence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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