The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph indicates the
amount
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of guests to three different London Museums from 2007 to 2012.
Overall
, during 2007-2012, there was an upward trend in the number of National Gallery's
visitors
, meanwhile, the figure of
guest
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in the others experienced a downward trend from 2007 to 2009- 2010 before undergoing an upward trend in the
last
three years. In 2007, Victoria and Albert was the most popular museum with nearly 14
million
people. The same figure in the next
year
and
then
, the sum of
guest
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guests
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started
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decrease to about 6
million
guests in 2010. Even so, the situation
had
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changed
positely
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positively
politely
when the number
increase
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gradually from about 6
million
to 10
million
in 2012.
Similarly
, British Museum had approximately 12
thousand
visitors
in 2007 and
dreased
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decreased
dressed
by 6
thousand
in the next two years. In 2010, there was a
steadily rose
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in the number of its from 6
thousand
to under 15
thousand
people.
By contrast
,
National
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Gallery saw
a
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stability
year
over
year
from above 5
million
visitors
to about 16
million
visitors
in 2012. Specifically, they
was
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the least popular museum with about 6
million
people in the
fisrt
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first
year
and kept going up to about 11
million
in 2010.
Then
, they
remain
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stable with the same figure in 2011 and peaked
in
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16
million
in 2012.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million, year, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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