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"In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common." Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#countries #phone #cellphone #apps #development
Nowadays online payment is popular
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all over the globe. After considering the benefits and drawback ,
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 my opinion advantages of
this
 scenario outweighs
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.
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 the reason behind my view.
Firstly
, there are several benefits
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 using
the
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online media for different payment options. They are
one
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a
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click
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one-click
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 solution for getting
any thing
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anything
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 and everything you want at your door step
with out
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 stepping out.
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example
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 Google
pay
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 or Paytm are more convenient
option
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 to get food through Swiggy.
Moreover
,
this
 will be useful for booking movie tickets well in advance and
thus
 not only reduces the rush in ticket
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 but
also
 reduces our stress .
Apart from
this
, one going for a long journey
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 required to carry much money , which is often believed as unsafe.
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 money through mobile gives much convenience.
For instance
 , people visiting
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a museum
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no
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 need to to carry
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cash ,
it
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 can
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 through
cell
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a cell
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 phone app.
it
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also
 gives all
details
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 of
museum
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.
Nevertheless
, they are free from the limitations. They are limited in terms of safety. There are several scammers used to crack
people
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password
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passwords
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 which can end up in financial loss. But,
this
 can be overcome with the help of precautions and carefulness
while
 dealing dealing them. So, the advantages
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limitation
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. In Conclusion, after considering the aforementioned reason, in my
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 the advantage of using
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a smartphone
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smartphone
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smartphones
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 for any
payment related
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 matter is beneficial.
Although
 there are some
limitation
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 which can
overcome
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 by carefulness by using them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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