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The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. Write at least 150 words

The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. Write at least 150 words
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This
 table depicts
people
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people's
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consumption
 of bear and
fruit
juice
 each year in various
countries
 around the world in
litres
.
Overall
, it is clear from the table that the majority of
countries
that
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shown on the table consume
beer
 more than
fruit
juice
. Turning to the details,
beer
 has the highest
consumption
from
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in
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 Ireland at 155
litres
 per person per year.
Whereas
, Finland has the lowest amount of
beer
 among the other
countries
 at 79
litres
 and
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 is the next in order at 80
litres
.
On the other hand
, Canada has the largest number of
fruit
juice
consumption
 at 52.6
litres
.
Although
 New Zealand has the lowest amount of
drinking
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fresh
fruit
juice
 at 24.8
litres
,
UK
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the UK
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 and
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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 are nearly close at 29.3 and 28.1
litres
.
To sum up
, we could say that
beer
consumption
 is higher compared to
fruit
juice
 in all different
countries
.
Which the
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The
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 highest figure
on
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for
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 consuming
beer
 is 155
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fruit, juice, countries, litres, beer with synonyms.
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